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MY LIPS HURT REAL BAD
I also went through a OMG I WANNA REMIX THIS phase. It's a fun one to do too because all the melodies and chords are really easy to figure out.
Anyways my opinion is that you over used the piano a little, and of course the mix needs work (Although I am not the best judge of that currently because I am not in the studio just on a laptop).
If you would like, send me a PM this weekend or next and I will do an in depth analysis of it and go over some mastering tips with you, and if you would like check out my versions. They are OLD though. Cheers,
previously TheBreeD now Logical Defiance
Just needs work done to the mix and you get yourself a good song. Cheers,
Hi, what should you suggest that i should work on in the mix?
First off, amazing song! I was very impressed by the quality of the song overall. The problem where it won't play the edited version when you re-upload stuff is solved by just clearing the cookies before you load the page. Anyways I'll look more into an extensive review later, but your under my radar now. Cheers,
thanks for the review and the 10!!!
I'm having a lot of trouble believing you created that bassline or that beat. They both show a great deal of professionalism, when at the same time all the other sounds are terribly mixed and don't fit the song at all. No idea what to make of that. Good luck,
Well...thanks, I think?
Well for one I think it could use a punchy/dry kick to go along side the one in there. Also, A trick I use when trying to make a progression/automation as a lead up to the main melody is to not go all the way to the full sound before the beat drops, but to go most then skip to the full at the start of the beat(poorly explained sorry). That way you can have an element of boom feeling that sounds cooler. Also that first main melody is very unclear,which could be on purpose, but you should compress it otherwise. Anyways if you have any questions I'm free to help most of the time. Cheers,
It all felt really dry. Maybe add some reverb or delay on that piano line. There are good elements in this song. I liked the melody and concept in it, but the structure is simplistic(as expected since your new) Also after 34 seconds the song becomes really mushy(solved by EQ and compression). Work on learning how to EQ, compress, and add effects. The mix is pretty important, especially in this genre. Good luck to you in the world of music. Feel free to ask me any questions if you need help. Cheers,
Really you could go anywhere with an intro like that. It sounds almost like your trying to make an ambient song though because the drums are so quiet and wet(which is I assume because its an intro).
The melody doesnt seem to stick to one scale though it starts off sounding like its going to be a happy song and then theres a minor all of a sudden and it sounds sad so maybe work on a slower transition to that.
If your using FL Studio feel free to ask me any questions via NG or my email firstname.lastname@example.org. Cheers,
Logical Defiance a.k.a BreeD
very newgroundsy hardcore. couldnt give you much advice. the mastering is fine, so is the melody. good general song.
i like the drum pattern(in its fullest) but ya the quality of all the sound is sub par. Interesting at least.
hey thx and yea but then again its just something i put together for fun.
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